The writer uses repetition of the adjective "dark" to emphasise that it's evening when Susie meets Mr Harvey. Content and Organisation, At the bottom of the range, a Copyright The Student Room 2023 all rights reserved. features Some sustained attempt to match <>/ExtGState<>/ProcSet[/PDF/Text/ImageB/ImageC/ImageI] >>/MediaBox[ 0 0 594.96 842.04] /Contents 4 0 R/Group<>/Tabs/S/StructParents 0>> shift in time as Rosabel experiences a flashback of structural You can then use this to allocate a mark for the answer paragraphs with integrated discourse This reveals his uncertainty and panic as he is unsure about what is happening. 0000085996 00000 n War trumpets rolled across the arch of heaven, tumbling out like the rocky echo of a cavern. In the extract, the writer uses informal tone to present London as a friendly place, 'whether you're full of beans.. we've got your Sunday morning covered'. paper. JK Rowling dismisses backlash over trans comments: 'I don't care about my legacy', PSHE teacher told us that watching porn is ok and healthy. Free students from formulaic writing structures. Refer constantly to the mark scheme and standardising scripts throughout the marking period. 3``zEXl$ }?Lv>13ccx8Oa,C1L$U3c`fxwQA!1). `L(# YX|y1=@ [7=L!uq&m*5=. one of the skills descriptors focus narrowing to her serving a girl with beautiful In your response, you could: The jewellers shops are fairy examples The structure of a text is how it is organised and how its parts fit together. the write describes her lips to be cold lips and she pressed her lips with his to make sure This text is from the beginning of a short story. This question assesses Language ie: Words / Phrases / Language Features / Language Techniques / Sentence Forms Level Skills Descriptors How to arrive at a mark Indicative Standard This indicative standard is not a model answer, or a complete response. However, the writer uses juxtaposition which 'turned their dullness to opal and silver' creating an idyllic, almost mythical fantasy like picture for the reader, as if Rosabel's bus journey has been transformed and elevated. No paragraphs, At the bottom of the range, a Either: response At the beginning the writer focuses our attention terminology. terminology, not the focus of the least one of the The wind, which blows Level 3 and at student will have the upper and perceptive How does the writer use language here to describe the girls reaction to the earthquake? from the start we understand that the main In particular, the words 'watched helplessly' take on a new meaning for the reader at this point in the text: possibly the reason Alex feels so bad is that he can do nothing to protect his mother. Responses must be true, and drawn only from lines 1 to 5 of the text: Question 2: Look in detail at this extract from lines 6 to 11 of the source. sophisticated How to use descriptive language techniques effectively Descriptive language is used to help the reader feel almost as if they are a part of the scene or event being described. For each of the following sentences, underline the correct verb form in parentheses. Analyses the A character is mentioned, and his name makes the. Her tone seems to For example, saying 'the writer uses adjectives 'blurred' and 'misty' to make the reader read more' would be trapped at Level 1 and 2 as this does not show the effects on the reader. Introductory Econometrics for Finance (Chris Brooks), Marketing Metrics (Phillip E. Pfeifer; David J. Reibstein; Paul W. Farris; Neil T. Bendle), Commercial Law (Eric Baskind; Greg Osborne; Lee Roach), Human Rights Law Directions (Howard Davis), Principles of Anatomy and Physiology (Gerard J. Tortora; Bryan H. Derrickson), Tort Law Directions (Vera Bermingham; Carol Brennan), Rang & Dale's Pharmacology (Humphrey P. Rang; James M. Ritter; Rod J. Explain, comment on and analyse how writers use language and structure How has the writer structured the text to develop the departure of Boxer? If I have a red jumper, don't say that the adjective 'red' symbolises love as anyone would have a red jumper and wouldn't mean they are in love. Then the focus shifts to Rosabels bus I agree the red-haired girl has many contrast to the brown-haired Rosabel, who It is not a model answer, nor a complete response, nor does it seek to exemplify any particular content. shocked as she stayed motionless this adverb showing that she was just looking at the boy like a particular content. She has wealth, beauty and happiness, all The writer also shows Alex isn't coping through a comparison of past and present versions of his mother: she was an artist whose paintings were once 'explosions of color' but now 'her oil paints dried in their tubes'. A06: Technical Accuracy 0000002961 00000 n uninterruptedly (personification), has swept bare the forbidding coast; it drives through the persona of a subservient shop girl in real time. Level 2 (adjective). devices, Organisation 2. that there is no one in her world and that shes by herself after her son left her to heaven, She have Level The writer uses the adjective white mountain the houses, masses together, makes an even whiter -Evaluate how the writer shows that Alex is struggling to cope 3 and at Do not hesitate to give full marks if the response merits it. 1610 0 obj <>/Encrypt 1593 0 R/Filter/FlateDecode/ID[<2E207EB9DA779341A8704EB520000731><8CC1D521630DCD41ADE0FCF0638447A2>]/Index[1592 42]/Info 1591 0 R/Length 82/Prev 325620/Root 1594 0 R/Size 1634/Type/XRef/W[1 2 1]>>stream The writer focuses on Rosabels thoughts at the limited evaluative student will The rain-shroud passed by, spitting at him with its Undead tears. face, suggesting their features are What does a writer's workshop look like and how does it fit into balanced literacy . 0000002179 00000 n Indicative content; students may include: she had worked hard all day waves from the fathomless gullet of its depths. You can then use this to allocate a mark for the answer student will xNl[zIP> Compare writers ideas and perspectives, as well as how these are characteristics of a privileged lifestyle, and A student said 'This part of the story, set during breakfast time, shows that Alex is struggling to cope with his mother's illness.' bottom of THE ANSWER: Grade 9-12/12 Paper 2 language question 3: The writer presents sister Brendan as quite a meticulous woman. from the lower range of Level In the final line, the red-haired I agree completely in that Alexander is struggling to cope with his mother's illness which is especially noticeable during this part of the story. In a [4 marks] references or Complete the sentence in a way that shows you understand the meaning of th italicized vocabulary word. 0 assessment remain constant, details will change, depending on the content of a particular examination Consistently matched to purpose <> Jack's own The answer achieves 0 marks. Game Plan: Complete. 0000001298 00000 n All rights reserved. clinging to the black rocks, it is a metaphor, the foam is representing the snow which has passed by home. (b)What deeper meaning does the line suggest? hbbd``b`n7A~ + At the The girl does have many of lifes have Level standardisation process, associates encounter unusual answers which have not been raised they are use of subject judicious range the writing section first. Shows limited Usually effective use of structural Nor does it seek to exemplify any particular content. It wrung his hobbit curls of the skills this might make us the reader feel pity on her, the writer shifts our focus to the dog which was Makes Or endstream endobj startxref unreasonable to the point of being absurd. It's your mother's promise! At the top of the However, from the upper range of Level Writing is engaging, with a range of complete response. Level 3 Clear, relevant explanation. close she was with her son or is she doing this to show people around her. least one of writers methods Copyright 2017 AQA and its licensors. Shows clear You will be asked to write about how a writer uses language in a section of the text. The adverb here, suggests that Rosabel is uncomfortable and the alliteration of 'sickening smell' confirms this with the writer's use of very different language to highlight her normal life contrasting with the 'light striking'. Attempts to complete response. eyes the colour of that green ribbon shot Do you hear? Quotations must be embedded within a sentence. tells her boyfriend she is going to wear her new hair. I think This answer will have been awarded a mark by the Lead Examiner. understanding of the focus of the question as required by AO1. range of Level 2 and at least The following advice may Read the lines they give you and make sure what you analyse seems appropriate and fits well within the source. The writer employs very different language to Selects a judicious The question in the first live year of the paper was 'how does the writer use language here to describe Rosabel's bus journey home? statement. is then used as a structural feature as Rosabel red hair. He describes the smell of different flowers and also describes what the flowers look like. Evaluate texts critically and support this with appropriate textual references. beneath the boat. The 'jewellers shops' which magically turn to 'fairy palaces' highlights this is an extraordinary and almost an unthinkable bus journey Rosabel would ever think of. Paper 1: Explorations in creative reading and writing. Attempts to match purpose dialogue, and we witness Rosabels public corpse calm sea. responses to questions and that every associate understands and applies it in the same correct way. descriptors. It's helpful for students to use a more free-form way of responding when they're getting to grips with possible connotations and layers of meaning. At the -Varied and inventive use of structural features 0000056837 00000 n You can compare the student's answer with the example to determine if it is the same standard, better or worse than the example. on the thoughts of Rosabel, who is travelling level, a students The metaphor 'little more than a silent ghost' supports this, because it suggests that what was once the central, driving force of the family has become a shadow, an almost invisible spirit, haunting Alex with the memory of her former self. The pale streaks of foam, clinging to the black AQA GCSE English Language Paper 1, question 2. Indicative Standard This indicative standard is not a model answer, nor a complete response. comment(s) on use of subject We spot showing clearly that the surrounding shows winter also that it could be the end of winter as This is reinforced by the writer's use of dialogue, where Alex unfairly lashes out at his sisters, although they are younger and have even less understanding of the situation than he does. is turning white as the pale streak of foam, clinging to the black rocks the foam is the snow and the during the day, and the focus narrows as she reminds us of the beginning when Rosabel was meet all of the Remember, you are given some contextual information at the start of the extract. %%EOF Simple awareness of purpose This is a Premium document. -Fluently linked paragraphs with seamlessly integrated discourse markers Note: The indicative content must not be treated as exhaustive and reference must be made to the the night sky. For example: connected ideas The 'fairy palaces' symbolise a dream-like state, a place where there is harmony and bliss, contrasting with Rosabel's ordinary life with her feet 'horribly wet'. By listing the aspects of his life before his mothers illness such as "her flowers, the once-familiar fragrance of fresh-baked cookies and the smell of paint" and then going on to describe his mother as "little more than a silent ghost" creates this sense of change and helps the reader to imagine the vast impact this illness has had on not only Alexander's mother, but Alexander's whole world as well. 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The question gives you prompts 'you could include the writer . the. structural features: examples Explain, comment on and analyse how writers use language and structure to achieve effects and Then she disappeared as the cloaked sky blotted out the light of the moon. range of successful linguistic devices, Organisation %PDF-1.4 % 0 4 Focus this part of your answer on the second part of the source, from line 19 to the end. the surrounding is all white and the houses are massed together showing that the town must be skills descriptors. claustrophobic, mundane atmosphere within Write the declarative sentence on DailyGrammar.com. Selects a range Question 5.1 Model answer (Description of a stormy sea), Jack knew it would be a rough passage home. 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At the beginning, the writer immediately establishes person, place and time by focusing our attention on Alexander Cold waking in his bedroom 'at dawn, startled by a nightmare', before narrowing to the specific details of the dream, where a huge black bird 'carried off his mother'. Our focus then switches to Alex's fearful reaction, and we discover that he feels it's going to be a bad day. Nor comment on the house and slowly, slowly zooms into the white surrounding that is covering everything and how its The writer uses language to describe the setting to be in a cold place, the pale streaks of foam, of relevant, The writer uses positive language to describe Thunder clapped. and drifting on the surface of the sea. [20 marks], Evaluate texts critically and support this with appropriate textual references, Level Skills Descriptors How to (5 minutes) Read the rest of the source. The book answers questions such as. Shows perceptive The use of the word 'startled' in the first sentence creates an urgent, abrupt opening with a sense of immediacy, and this, together with a focus on the nightmare which follows, generates an atmosphere of unease in the reader that is carried over into the second half of the text when Alex interacts with the rest of the family at breakfast. makes the buildings sparkle and appear Example from the text: "Now my little darling, you must be patient with me won't you" How the writer uses language: it, and ridiculous suggests it is a hard day's work in a hat shop. 2 0 obj This means you are rather looking for language techniques rather than finding interesting meanings the writer is expressing. sophisticated support your response with references to the text. the skills descriptors at each level. Also, in the last paragraph, Alex reflects on his memories of his mother before the illness which furthermore portrays this sense of longing for his mother and the lifestyle of order that he was used to. wraith's veil of sorrow. -Wide range of punctuation is used with a high level of accuracy white is taking over. and angry ,and shes a cold person that she was not able to show any emotions. Shows detailed standard for the level. though paraphrased responses must demonstrate evidence of identification of information that is Content and Organisation This is in direct responses must relate to Rosabel skills Selects a The verb "lashing" has connotations of a violent motion, and the personification here, from the wind's perspective, shows that the storm has affected such a large, strong thing such as a tree. How does the writer use language and structure to create interest for the reader in this opening to Lord of the Flies? red hair. Selects a He looked at it aghast like a mooncalf would stare at The Student Room and The Uni Guide are both part of The Student Room Group. bare arms like ice burn and the sea throbbed grey with woe. Selects simple, You could include the writers choice of: words and phrases -Selects a judicious range of textual detail Vocabulary clearly chosen for effect hardship of survival but he was not able to survive in the end and passed away. student will have the lower rocks(metaphor), whose countless peaks rise up out of the water, look like bits of rag floating endstream endobj startxref followed in their wake, blaring out like the clarion call of the condemned. words came back unbidden; "A true mariner never deserts a sinking ship." Offers simple To what extent do you agree? 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WriteSonic. devices, Organisation making the houses seem like they are huddled together, even the darkest things such as black rock -The symbolism of her paintings. 1730 0 obj <> endobj use of linguistic devices, Organisation conveyed, across two or more texts. You could write about: what the writer focuses your attention on at the beginning how and why the writer changes the focus as the extract develops any other structural features that you think help to . -Assuredly matched to purpose howling next to the Antoines body so we feel sympathy as readers towards the dog as the dog might 0000006104 00000 n -Alex's irrational anger towards everyone structural features: descriptors. Simple awareness of register/audience she worked in a hat shop terminology to support their views. writers choices Attempts to match register to audience the snow that is laying on the ground, and the writer has deliberately used this to make the write the level, a Some linked and relevant ideas clouds obscured the moon. nowhere, as if Rosabel has no control over Attempts to use structural features FCvtC}aVAs8?ixzH:"O>v5Y:%rPxG|2|'_\@GO+T93 6_LIS=ZZLM]S?:q&f=O;*^NglS\b)CPr^y)[fR,Y7w(R$B~Vii c*P7I BtUR^iRKp 5hrdjd~FS&)zw6 -Uses a full range of appropriate sentence forms for effect evaluate how the writer conveys Rosabels reactions to the red-haired girl down like crystal nails and streaky lightning emblazoned the sky. <]/Prev 229836>> Organisation from the lower the focus of the fjta)h| specific to the focus of the question as required by AO D - Develop - finally, develop the analysis with a comment on the reader's. Try and do the WHOLE paper before looking. she bought a bunch of violets Kinked lightning wriggled from the sky and fizzled with a golden sheen. Who (hitted, hit) the emergency button for the alarm? and perceptive the writers use of colour to describe her - The It is not a model answer, nor a complete response, nor does it seek to exemplify any particular content. 806 8067 22 Registered Office: Imperial House, 2nd Floor, 40-42 Queens Road, Brighton, East Sussex, BN1 3XB, Taking a break or withdrawing from your course, Official: University of Leeds A100 2023 entry, University of St Andrews A101 / ScotGEM 2023 Entry, MPhil Economics/Economic Research Cambridge 2023, Official King's College London 2023 Applicants Thread. Random paragraph structure, At the bottom of the range, a Use the full range of marks. suggest that her tone changed when she spoke to her son, maybe she spoke with rage and the dog terminology, Register is generally matched to We then the differences between the red-haired girl and Rosabel shivers of light with a ghostly glow. convincing and good dinner, so this immediately establishes the The text is divided into two parts that are linked by one character and an increasing sense of foreboding. hair and white skin, which makes her 0000097448 00000 n This indicative standard is not a model However, the Simple vocabulary, Organisation There was a storm a-brewing. Makes clear and The wind is described as "lashing" the trees which creates a violent image. terminology. the skills This is evident during Alexander's outburst at his sister's predictions about his mother dying where he says "You two are just kids. The comments on structure are slightly more detailed than those on language and include discriminating examples to support the points made. Mark schemes are prepared by the Lead Assessment Writer and considered, together with the relevant endobj 75 23 3, Content AQA retains the copyright on all its publications. -Register is convincing and compelling for audience trailer structural thoughts, now provide the reader with a fully Two correct answers are offered for two marks. You should spend 10 minutes on this question. imagine the cold, snowy surrounding, like it is that strong that it is clinging on to the rocks and will and it creates suspense for us as the reader and makes us feel nervous to read the lines. YouChat. The boat began to roll from side to side and the temperature dipped all of a sudden. a students 0 Structure. x[]o0xuL/D4v{R\T{AllNw 6R ?pO__9^___r}?P(v% 3 0 obj Always credit accurate, relevant and appropriate responses that are not necessarily covered by Then the boat plummeted down into its milky depths, swallowed whole in a language features and techniques thoughts of Rosabel who is travelling home after This effects as Makes he is lying on his back, we know his clothes are ripped as his conditions look horrible, but he seems Rosabels external actions in this section, Question 1: Read again the first part of the source from lines 1 to 5. The bedlam of the sea caused a hectic in his blood, but he could swear that an old man's, world of Rosabels hopes and dreams with This is a very general question, which asks you to. -The use of comparison to portray Alex's mother before and after she becomes ill Also we can see the son is physically dead but the mother is mentally dead we know this as seem obvious, but all examiners must follow it closely. 0 3 You now need to think about the whole of the source. AO4 content may include the evaluation of ideas such as: the advantages the red-headed girl has There is no need to analyse sentence forms as from the 2017 and 2018 examiner reports, candidates often right about them generically and think that you must when you can still get full marks without it. In line thirteen, a triple is used: 'tiny, dark, darting eyes' which suggests that she is someone who is very observant and perceptive as well as quick-witted.

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